chocoholic

Welcome to YWS! If you're looking for people who like writing, you've come to the right place. The site is pretty easy to get around, but if you have any ...

First of all I want to say that this story just keeps getting better and better. I'm really liking it so far. I liked how he was dreaming in the ...

They sound interesting. I don't know much about sci-fi (I've never read it, only watched a few sci-fi shows) and I can't write it, but I'll check your first one ...

I have a big notebook next to my bed where I write about the books I read (not all of them, every second or third). I write about what happened ...

Okay, this was short and I found it quite dry. And you called it The Debate, saying it was an argument between the author and editor! This was no argument. ...

Dislike- That you get to go to uni and do law soon while I have to wait for years Like- That you give such nice, detailed and helpful critiques that ...

Hey. Just repeating what kitty said, it's polite to critique at least two pieces of writing before posting your first. And then when you do post, it's best to double ...

This is good. You have a very interesting life, I wouldn't mind living it. I want to do law too, though I have a few years still before university. Let ...

Yay!!!! WooHooo!!!!! You don't know how long I've been waiting for this chapter. Please please please please please don'tt take so long with the next one. I might die if ...

I liked it. The only thing I can complain about was some spelling and puncuation issues. Apart from that it was good. Sorry, but I don't have time for a ...

A flash of lightning momentarily illuminates the landscape. Great opening line. It draws the reader in and makes them wnat to read more. The sky is a tumultuous battlefield. The ...

Hmm... I really don't know what to say. I guess I'll start off with what I liked. Jill is a good character, you did a good job with her. You ...

Nice. Welcome to YWS. I'm chocoholic. If you have any questions or want a review or anything, feel free to PM me. I'll do my best. I hope you enjoy ...

I liked it. Is it going to be produced? It could look really good. You never explained why the mother spent all her time telling them what to do and ...

Haha! Loved it, it was so funny. victims of a yellow death Does this mean the bus crashes, or it takes them to school and school is boring? that the ...