chocoholic

Hi and welcome. If you have a question or want a crit or just want to talk just PM me and I'll do my best. What genre are you into? ...

The three posted chapters of How You Break My Heart could do with some more crits. (The link is for chapter 1. You can find the other two chapter sin ...

I write pretty much anywhere. Sometimes I take my notebook to school and write in the 20 minutes we're supposed to be reading. I do a lot of writing in ...

I quite liked it. Your imagery was very good and the story had a nice feel to it. I couldn't see any mistakes apart from this bit- The street was ...

I liked this. I couldn't find any mistakes, and the way you wrote it was good. When is more coming?

These soudn great. Especially yours, sokool. Can't wait to read these if you post them!

Okay, first of all, your plot is intriguging, but I was only able to find that out because I kept on reading. You need to space out your work before ...

Hmm... interesting. I can't say I loved the ending. I mean, it was good, but I just didn't love it. I'm not really sure how to explain it. I'll tell ...

I hope you don't mind me digging this up, but I was looking at your writing and decided to review it. I liked this piece. What magor historical event is ...

(Ten years) “Happy Birthday to you!” I smiled in wonder as Rosa put down the cake in front of me. She had spent the entire afternoon making it, with some ...

I finally got around to editing this. I hope it's better, please tell me what you think!

Hmm... short. Very short, much shorter than the others, but good all the same. I'm still confused about the grandmother, but apart from that, no complaints. Post more soon! h, ...

Yeah, I'm thinking of changing my last name because what it means isn't the nicest word (I'm not comfortable telling you my last name on the internet. You'll find out ...

Nice. Cool activities, I'll definietely have to try them sometime!

It's good. But why do you post the chapter in two halves instead of the whole thign at once? The rest of the week passes us by without incident. Mother ...