chocoholic

I don't really get what this has to do with 9/11. It's about bus bombings (I don't live in America, so maybe that's why). The ending seemed very Hitler like ...

That was cute, but I don't think it really belongs in Non-Fiction. It showed little kids so perfectly, how they can fall and be crying on minute, and then running ...

That was sweet. I'm more of a dog-person than a cat-person, but this was really cute. Your imagery wasn't bad, but could be improved on a bit. I didn't really ...

Umm... wow! That was really good. It made me stare at the screen and think, oh my god, if only I had written that. I can see why you won ...

Nice. A few mistakes I noticed: You call Madison Morgan a bit. I don't get that, is it just a mistake? Rachel: sure... Capatilize sure. Madison: (Sighs and hangs up) ...

Hehe. I liked it, it was funny, yet very thought-provoking. I really don't know anything on the love issue, but I'm sure you'll get a good mark. The only comment ...

I quite liked it. Your descriptions were good, but your plot, well, no. Not so much. Your thoughts on the ocean were... profound. I liked that. As an exersize for ...

I found this story very quick. You kept moving about and there wasn't much description. In truth, I found it a bit annoying. I also noticed that you switched the ...

Yay! A horse story! I haven't read one of these for ages. I gave a shiver as I twisted the handle of the wide door and stepped into the cold. ...

Repating what Razor said, please dohble-space your work. It makes life much easier for us. The story, I think it could use some work. Your description needs work, and your ...

Wow! I loved these. Your imagery was really nice, and the story just made me feel very serene. The only thing I can comment upon badly is I had no ...

Wow! Umm... I don't really knwo what to say. The story started out very normally, but it ended up going, weird. Little man in a suit? I just didn't really ...

First off, I think you have a very good piece of work, but needs some revision. A few things I noticed, How she droned through class, staring out the dust ...

Aww... that was really cute and funny. I really liked it. Your characters were well developed, and the woman in the drive was very... original (not speaking sarcasitcally). There was ...

I haven't seen almost famous, but I'll do my best to crit. This really didn't seem to have much of a plot. It was really just snippets of conversations by ...