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Sorry to drag this up, but I wanted to check out some of your other stuff. The poem was good. There was feeling in there, and it was very real. ...

Well, I haven't read any more of your poems (I'll check them out, though!) but I didn't like it that much. It seemed to me one of those pieces you ...

I quite liked it. It was short, and more description should be added. Also, paragraphs. It's very annoying to have to read a big lump of text, people don't like ...

Hehe. I actually thought that was funny, but I can have a weird sense of humour sometimes. You do need to space out your writing, it's very annoying hvaing it ...

Nice. The rhythm was different from a lot of poems I've read, and the topic was dark but pulled off in a light-hearted way.

That was a good essay. I go to a church and know a few 'pastor's daughters', but my church is a bit different. The father of one of my best ...

That was realy deep. I hate wars, the only thing they're good for is showing us how boring our lives are. In the way of a crit, the writing is ...

That was really beautiful. I don't really know what to say, except that I loved it and can't find anything wrong with it.

I quite liked it, though I'm not sure it belongs in Fantasy Fiction. I thought it was very quick, and it had a fairytale element to it. I didn't get ...

The poem is sweet, but could be improved. Right now, it leaves little feeling or information. If it were longer it would be better. Also, you wrote desent, its decend.

Wow! That was really emotional. I don't know what I would have done if I had gone through all of that. I noticed that you spelt maybe wrong in one ...

Very interesting story. I don't read much Historical Fiction, and even less about pirates, but I really enjoyed this one. Then I catch the piece of rope I swung down ...

I liked it. I didn't see any spelling or gramatical mistakes, but I did wonder why they were speaking in English, and why the nurse couldn't understand Hoger. Or did ...

I didn't really get this. Did the boy actually sew the book onto his hand? The beginning had a very different tone to the rest of the story, perphaps you ...

Blacks? Jews? This is sounding like Nazi Europe, not 9/11 America. The bit about the pills was good, and the feelings you provoke are nice. I'd like to read more, ...