chocoholic

Aww... that was sweet. Mothers are like that. There was no spelling or gramatical issues that I could see, so congrats on writing a very heartfelt poem!

I liked it. It was short, but your descriptions are nice and the ending is deep. Good job.

Okay, so I read about half and then stopped. This is very long, you should split it up and post it seperately. PM me once you've done that, and I'll ...

I quite enjoyed it, and I'll read the second part as soon as I finish writing this. I did notice one mistake. In one part you spell enemies wrong, you ...

Ugh! That's sort of creepy. As for a review, there are a couple of mistakes T he dog started to whine weakly This is just bad formatting, a mistake that ...

Welcome back JC. We all missed you a lot. Good luck with Bella, when are you going to post some pictures? I'm sure we'd all love to see them.

Hmm... well, first of all, I wasn't really sure if that was supposed to go in Non-Fiction or if it's actually just a story. Apart from that, I noticed a ...

Hmm... I liked it. The formatting was very good, and the idea isn't something I've read much (although I'm sure it's not uncommon). The spelling and grammar could be improved ...

This is very interesting, but I found it a bit hard to follow. If you spaced it out and added something more, it would be better. Overall, it's very good ...

I found this very fast. You would describe to an extent, but there was no emotion. The best writers make us feel sorry for the characters. You didn't. Your characters ...

Hah! It was funny. And I think I managed to keep track of it.

Okay, first, I don't think this belongs in Other Fiction. It would probably be better in Fantasy. As for the writing, I found the plot used, the writing rushed and ...

Nice, but it didn't ryhme. I think I could see where you were trying to rhyme, but it didn't actually work. If you want to find out, don't just write ...

Umm... I didn't really get that. What was happening? This didn't really have a beginning, middle and ending. It was more a random scene. WHat was the point? And what ...

I haven't read anything by Jodi Picoult (how do you pronounce that?) yet, but I've looked at the descriptions of her books, and I can't wait to read them. Hopefully ...