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That was... a bit random. I didn't really see the point in it. There wasn't any story, it was just writing. You did have nice descriptions, though. And some of ...

Okay, that was really, really, really creepy. But quite good. Apart from scaring me half to death, I really liked it. "Hey, baby," the woman called as Ian entered the ...

I love Doctor Who, but I didn't really get it. Couldn't find any mistakes, just a little confused.

I don't have much of a crit, bu I couldn't find anything wrong with it. There was no eorrors and nothing caught my eye and said, 'I'm written wrong! Point ...

I would edit as I type. I prefer to write on paper so I have to rewrite it, making it loads better in the process. And congrats on actually writing ...

Sounds interesting. Would you be willing to tell me what it's about? I'd love to read it so far, very different.

I'm only a beginning fantasy writer, but what about using limited magic with the people who do have it. And why do some people have magic and others don't? It ...

Well, it's not my first pick but it's alright. I found the whole plot a bit chilche. A girl who is forced into paegent's by her mum but doesn't actually ...

You could ty witing it a different way. Blog, journal, a news report or in a dream.

I like it. "Your mother, she's... died, in battle. Im very sorry, Miss Romano." I don't think the daughter would be the one told. They would probably want to speak ...

Okay, now it's time for a much better crit. I was confused. All the photos we had in the house from when mum was younger and living in Italy only ...

I think that if posts in the Lit forms actually cost, not as mnay people will bother, herefore there'll be less work to critique and the whole system destroys itself.

I live in Vic.

Well, it's late at night nd I'm tired, so I'm not going to bother giving a good crit until I ake up again, I just want to say tht I ...

I don't like the idea of going away, that isn't my type, but the rest sounds good. Just normal kids growing up. Yeah, I'd read it, maybe. If it was ...