chocoholic

Thankyou for breaking this up. Now, onto the critique. You know those stories about a new kid? How they come to a new school completely freaked out, and by the ...

Banned for not watching the comic genius Catherine Tate

Banned for questioning my banning of you

It's very long, and you're not going to get many crits unless you break it up. I found it alright, not brilliant, but alright. I'm not going to go into ...

Banned for playing with fire

I'm not going to ead it because I don't do horror, but your title will put people off. Nobody wants to read something with a title like that, because usually ...

*Sigh* And here I was thinking I stood a chance! It was really lovely and serene. Brilliantly hued plants I had a proble with this section. I think you should ...

Hi Rosie. We have the same name, my first name is Rosie! Welcome to YWS! I'm sure you'll like it here, but if you have any question or want a ...

Thanks for the crit scotty! I've edited this, please crit!

18/1/08 So... I thought I should use this to 'advertise' my writing or... something. I use a writing journal, but that private and sort of, random. So at the moment ...

Carly I took down the girl's details, not actually looking at her. "So, just come here tonight at seven and we should be able to fit you in, well, sometime. ...

Yay! I'm going to be the first! Haha! It's okay if you have exams. I mean, I know how important they are. And I haven't even started getting exams, and ...

This is... not a novel. It's just you insulting people, really. It's not interesting so far, and if the whole thing is like this, it won't be interesting at all. ...

Good. I liked this one. I think Carolina's anxienty was just right, and the excitement about having somebody actually sit with her at lunch. I could really feel for her. ...

Ouch! hat must've hurt. I;m always getting injured. I have a really bad ankle and it's always putting me on crutches. The worst time was probably when my friend pushed ...