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Finished it last night, absolutely loathed it! I was completely confused, and the ending told us almost nothing! I found it totally unrealistic and it made me want to throw ...

I liked it. Even the ending, and I'm not a huge fan of happy endings. The only thing that really got to me that this was in a different font, ...

Hello. Very nice. I'd like to see it continued. The magic infused glass wall, which had imprisoned me my whole life, now lay shattered upon the trembling grass. A cool ...

Hi Cam! Welcome to YWS! You speak French? Wow! I don't, but my cousin who is also on this site does. What type of things do you like to write? ...

Hey! Sorry it took so long to get around to this. But I'm here and critiquing now. I really liked this piece. The topic of love, not so much, but ...

I was bored and wanting to plan something, so I started off by creating a character using this, and now I have a plot, some more characters and two worlds! ...

Haha! That is so funny!

Very, very nice. Can't find anything to comment on apart from the doctor scene. It felt rushed, and I didn't like it. She fainted. At the hospital the doctors had ...

I like the first one the best, although the others sound cool. I'll read the prolouge for number one later today.

In my current novel a girl has been murdered, and the police are trying to find out who did it. Unfortunately, I have no idea how the police deal with ...

I really, really liked this. Especially about the beginning. The atmosphere you created was very peacful, but there felt like there was a little tension in there as well. Your ...

I didn't really like it. You were supposed to be writing a journal, but it read more like a story. A poorly written story. There are a lot of mistakes, ...

I have now read: My Sisters Keeper Change of Heart Plain Truth The Tenth Circle Keeping Faith I love all of them to bits. I have another four of her ...

Their End of the Wolrd has 59.3% chance of being a bestseller. Haha! That's such a cool site.

Okay, I'm assuming you've abandoned this piece, seeing as it's so old, but I'm going to critique it anyway. There is a billboard on the edge of town. It is ...