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Here's a couple of short stories for you to crit! Sister of Mine: One Fall:

Blind eyes:

Okay, so I'm not really a poetry person, but I'll do my best. I really liked this, although I think you should use capitals when needed. It would just look ...

First of all, you said it's hard for 13-14 year olds to write about hgh school, but I started high school when I was 12, which is only a year ...

I have a little notbook that I use at hmme, but I don't usa;;y bring it with me. I just hope that all my ideas come at school and I ...

Personally, I love HP, and think the books are brilliant. I don't agree that all thoe books are the same. Perhaps in structure they're similar, but there is something better ...

I tried to get on at about 11am on IE, but this message came up: phpBB : Critical Error Could not connect to the database

I'd love a critique on this songfic I did. Thanks!

Short, sweet and powerful. It's true, though. People will tell, despite how close you are. Please double-space in future, it makes the whole thing much easier to read. It's very ...

Hi. First thing I want to say is, double-spacing . Many new people to the site forget, but you must remember in future. It makes it much easier for the ...

10/3/08 Sorry Alainna. It's on my laptop, along with TEotW, and it's screwed up at the moment. Fortunately, all of my documents should be recoverable. If they're not, I'm lucky ...

I've never tried writing from a guy's POV unless you count a few third-person scene's revolving around a guy. I've always written about girls, I don't know why. I just ...

This was a really nice piece. I like your style and it flowed well. I would try to put in an atmosphere of tension, though. It felt all happy and ...

So I'm in a really hard spot right now, somewhere I've never been before, and I can't think of a solution, so I decided to leave it up to you! ...

Okay, so I'm back. Where did I leave off? Okay, let's go! Writing set me free. It was the truest part of me, the purest, rawest expression of my thoughts ...