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When I finshed my first novel, I made the mistake of leaving it for one day before editing. DO NOT DO THIS! I was much smarter with my second novel, ...

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I'm trying to get a blue star as well! I'd love a crit on these two!

I'm looking for more critiques on my novel. Thanks a lot. Also, I'm wanting another star as well, so if you want me to crit anything of yours, just tell ...

I'd love any crit's I can get on my new novel, Thanks heaps.

yanked open, then slammed and then blinding I would say, almost blinding I really liked this. Your writing style is very simple, but there's a lot lying underneath, if you ...

I couldn't find any mistakes, but I really don't think anybody above the age of 6 thinks this about their paents, and it was obvious your character was over the ...

rolling off of his chin I don't think you need to say of flapped I'd use a different word. This one doesn't seem fitting in relation to the rest of ...

I open my bedroom door and peer inside, making sure no one's in there. I see a small pile of clothes on my bed. New clothes-bought by Mom. Why does ...

I couldn't get onto groups at 9:40pm on IE. I got this message: Oops, that page doesn't exist Return To Home

I don't think I could do another one right now, but I m looking forward to November so I can do another one. I just need to come up with ...

Has anybody heard this song? It's from the 70's, but it's really funny. Here's the link: How funny is that?

Okay, now for chapter 2 and 3! And it opens with a clang. I peer inside, discovering that the contents of my locker have been disturbed. Nice. Was the nice ...

Me and my sister got smaked when we were little. If we were naughty, our parents would count to three, and then smack us if we didn't stop doing whatever ...

We shared crayons and blocks. We shared snacks and naps and secrets. We lived, laughed, and loved together. But, it's over now. We've grown apart, taken different roads. And all ...