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To keep you going before the last part of HYBmH is up... Could you please critique what I have of The Gate of Glendon so far? Its the prologue, and ...

I have 339 reviews. I want to have 350 (and a blue star) by May 1.

Very, very nice. I liked this bit more than I liked part two. The flashbacks were interesting, espcially as they gave away everything, yet didn't ruin the story. “I think ...

Can you still be a debater? If not, I'd like to be in the audience.

This is really good. I'm not sure if I like it better than chapter one, they're both great. Again, you should probably work on your decription, but the emotion was ...

Nice. No mistakes or anything, but I have a couple of comments. They were all the school had been talking about for days. It took me many times to figure ...

There's one in every class. Bullies who make school life a misery for their victims. But these days, there's no escape. The nightmare never ends. The bullies have gone on-line ...

Great story! I found no spelling mistakes nd such, so I'll just move straight onto my comments. attending a funeral in three days. This may be my inexperience with funerals, ...

I've read the first four chapters, but have only just decided to critique. I want to d more Romance, and this isn't too mushy. Isn’t it funny how years can ...

MACCAS RULES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How could you even think of going somewhere other than McDonalds?

I know you said you don't really do lyrics, but I'd love anything you can give me. If you can't, though, it's fine.

I'd love critique on my song, Mama's Smile Thanks!

Wildfire Please don't critique Moving Too fast or My Sister is an Actress. I am not continuing with those stories, and will have them deleted soon.

Okay, so poetry isn't my area of expertise, and I don't know how mch I can help you. I quite liked this. I like reading poetry and lyrics that are ...

Hi Jade, Welcome to YWS! I really hope you enjoy it here, and you'll definetely be able to talk to many great writers. A word of advice: Take all the ...