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I have a short story called How You Break My Heart (I've posted the last bit now). Do you think you could take a look at that?

Guess what? I uloaded the last part. Hope you like it!

Well everybody, this is the last part. Hope you enjoy! (Twenty-two years old) “You look beautiful,” my friends assured me as they fixed my veil. “He won’t believe you’re you!” ...

To be honest, this story was very boring. I'm not going to go through it all and tell you every little thing you did wrong, since Alainna pretty much covered ...

Another great episode. I think I'm starting to get the plot, and I'm looking forward to finding out what's going to happen. But, what's lube? Is it American or something, ...

This was cool, but I'm a little confused. I guess it'll all be explained in the next episodes, which I now have to go and read. But it was cool. ...

Well, I'm too lazy to read all of that (it looks very sciency, and sciene hurts my head), but last Thursday we were talking about evelution vs. creation at my ...

Cool! Good luck, I hope the rest of the performances go well!

Yay! Part three! They hug me until I can’t breath, they kiss me with their sticky lips, they cry in my hair. I'm pretty sure it's meant to be breathe. ...

I didn't connect to this piece in any way. I quite like learning about WW2, but this, as well as being quite boring and badly-written, was historically unaccurate. First of ...

English and Law. History is also good as long as we're not doing anything to do with Australia.

I didn't spot any spelling or grammatical mistakes, but it was a bit simple. Intersting, but a bit simple and a little confusing. I liked the boy, but I think ...

I think it's good. I get it, and everybody else seems to get it. It's easy to navigate and makes sense, so I don't think you need to change anything. ...

When can we expect chapter three of Evil Angel? And good luck with getting Killing Butterflies published! A short synopsis maybe, just for all your fans? Haha.

Will you critique what I have of The Gate of Glendon, my new novel? The prologue and first four chapters and sitting in my portfolio, just wishing they could be ...