chocoholic

Well, I finally got around to critiquing this. Here I go... The sky was dark overhead, and the acidic stench of blood and dark magic made it hard to breathe. ...

I know how you feel. Forget that anybody else writes. For a while, you are the greatest writer in the world. Don't try to write, just write. It doesn't matter ...

Jayleen James wasn't in Jayleen's first class, but they met up again in second period in which they both had music. "How was English?" James asked as they sat down ...

Just watched it! It was really good, but the sound was a bit annoying t times. But oh well, I read it before, anyway. And I can always read it ...

Haha! I loved it. It was so funny. I'd work a bit on your rythm, I really had trouble in some places being able to makes it flow, but overall ...

Icaruss, you never really specified which one you wanted critiqued, so I did Things Seen In Cab-Ride #276. Sorry I took so long. Anybody else want a critique on their ...

Jus so you know, I'm going to crit this poem as lyrics, since you replied to my lyrics critique request thread. Now... onto my critique! Overall, I liked it. I ...

Chocolte (duh). Savoury... probably chicken. Iced and Hot chocolates rule, and lemonade is good as well.

This is going to have to be a quick review because I have to get ready for school soon. Here I go! The hospital light bathes me in a sort ...

So... what's a senior? And what's this line supposed to mean? Too bad I'm the want- to- be-er. Yeah... I've got no idea what a senior is.

3.Anyone watch Doctor who? Pfft, Doctor Who is sci-fi for people who like Eastenders. H-h-how c-could you?????? Doctor who is like, awesome, and EastEnders is cool as well (not as ...

Jayleen Jayleen rolled her eyes, gave James an awkward hug (they had broken up yet again five days ago), and left to find the rest of her friends. Upson arrival ...

I really like this. I hope you write more, it's really good. Is this your first time writing lyrics? Okay now I'll try to be critical. He sees me beautiful. ...

I'm not sure I found this very interesting. It wasn't frightening, and it was pretty boring, to be honest. Daniel signed heavily and put the phone down; his office was ...

Jayleen Jayleen zipped up her bag and grabbed her ringing phone from the bench. "Are you here already?" she asked, glancing at Jessica and rolling her eyes. "Almost. Five minutes ...