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As I said for your last song, this needs a lot of work, but that's why I'm here! I'll do something I don't usually do, and start off with my ...

Jayleen Jayleen watched silently as James got pushed out of the store. She wasn't sure what was going on with him. Or was it her? They had been fine this ...

Yeah, that was totally, like, awesome. You are like such a, like, cool, like, person. You should, like, write, like, more. It was really funny! If there was any mistakes, ...

Well I'm hoping to write a musical sometime next year, so I'm very interested in how this turns out. I've already critiqued your first song, and I'd love it if ...

Well, I'm very inerested in this musical idea (it's something I'm considering myself) so I'm going t be very harsh. And feel free to PM me if you need any ...

All these numbers! They hurt, they hurt! *head explodes*

I quite liked it. You said you had no tune, have you got oe now? Because I was using a simple tune and it worked for the entire song. The ...

I'm not going to comment on your writing, since it seemed pretty good to me. But there are other things I'm going to say. I didn't really understand this. It ...

Thanks Nate! It's How ou Break My Heart. Can't wait to see what's coming next.

Love the changes Nate! Just wondering, can we delete folders? Because I had a spelling mistake in one of my folder names, so I made a new one, but the ...

By popular I mean the books that everybody, not even huge readers, read and love. I don't know if I like reading them. I did love Harry Potter, but I'm ...

Use other people to describe them. Maybe their best friend is jealous of their hair, or their father keeps commenting on how similar they look or something.

Jayleen Jayleen walked home that day, instead of going in James' car like everyone else. He didn't even offer her a lift. When she got home, Jesse was shouting at ...

Yes, that's right. I have now been on this wonderful site for an entire year. Well, not quite yet, actually. It's 7:30 in the morning and I joined quite late ...

Whatever It Takes- Leona Lewis