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Hi! Welcome to YWS! You've joined other writing sites I see? Well, I'm sure you'll find that YWS is the best out of all of them. You don't need to ...

I can't say I loved this. It lacks emotion. You might not be writing a story, but you're still sort-of telling one. You need to make the reader/listener think, make ...

Love the Leaderboards Nate. Hopefully they'll get me reviewing a lot more!

Ah! Thought I'd done this one. *scurries off to check date* Nup, this is from the sventh. When I was sick! I must have skimmed it without actually critiquing it. ...

Jayleen Jayleen opened the window and let James climb into her bedroom. Her textbok lay open on the desk, and a few newspaper cuttings about Tony Mokbel sat o top ...

Haha! That was so funny!

Firstly I'd like to say, I quite liked this. Pats of it could use some work, but there were other parts that hit me and just said, this person is ...

I think Euthanasia is actually chosing to be killed with a drug than waiting until you die, which some termainally ill patients do. Unfortunately, it's illegal here, so they have ...

Quote this. Because I'm goody-two-shoes. You get a dime. Prok gets no dime. This is my third attempt. Please, no one beat me to the punch this time. EDIT: Yay! ...

What type of football are you talking about? We've got Soccer, Grid Iron and AFL. There may be more, but these are the ones I know. Either one I can ...

Quote this. Because I'm goody-two-shoes. You get a dime. Prok gets no dime. This is my third attempt. Please, no one beat me to the punch this time. EDIT: Yay! ...

Yay! Happy birthday guys! Hope you have a great time. Here's my present: :elephant: :thud: :smt026 :smt024 :smt023 :smt031 :birthday: :smt101 :smt046

Jayleen Jayleen pulled her diary out of her bag and flipped it open to that week. She had... a Music Composition, a Maths practice exam and... Oh god! She had ...

May I sort of amuse you? I'd love another critique on one of my songs, and feel free to do the ther one if you want. This is Journey: By ...

Jayleen "You're home late," Katheire remarked as Jayleen walked through the front door. Ray ha dropped her off at the top of her street to make it easier to take ...