chocoholic

I rally liked this, although I'm not really sure if this should be in Other Fiction? I got thefeeling that this was set in the past. Perhaps 1800's England? Forgive ...

I say write what you know. Don't try to write in a country you know nothing of just because you think it'd be more interesting. To the contrary, I'd much ...

Hello! I'd just like to say before I begin, I think this sng is pretty good as it is, but as you'll find out in my critique, it could be ...

I first read this when you posted it, but I sort of forgot to critique it, but her I am now. The first thing I want to say is, I ...

Yay! You're back. It'll be nice to have you around again.

Death

Yay! Go JFW! You rock!

Yay! You wrote with a tune in mind! I'm sure of it. Although I couldn't fit this one in perfectly, I could hear a rhythm and the beginning of a ...

I don't live in the UK (although I wish I did and I'm still trying to convince my parents that it's a better place to live than Australia), but there's ...

Honestly, I didn't think it was very good. I liked what you were saying, I just don't think it was a very good song. There was no rhythm to it, ...

Tired, withered hands lay quietly on the fraying quilt, as eyes blanketed by cataracts rested lovingly on the clock that had given her so much time. Beautiful opening! You captured ...

Hello, I don't think I've seen you around the lyrics forums. Is this your first song posted? Have you critiqued anything here? Just wondering, because this is really good, and ...

I really liked this piece. Now, I haven't critiqued any fiction for a while, so forgive me if I'm not very helpful, but I'll try. Of course, I smile and ...

Congrats! It's a nice feeling, I agree. Although I've never been able to do 120'000 words. And I've never been able to afford to take my family out to the ...

I just wrote this. It's very slow and goes up and down. It's the best song I've written so far, so good that my mum and sister didn't believe I ...