chocoholic

This was really good. I'm very interested in WW2, and I beleve this was the bombing of Dresden, when the English got back at the Germans for the Blitz? Correct ...

Welcome to YWS! The first thing I'd like to point out is that we have a two for one reviewing policy. We like it if you would make at least ...

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This reads more of a speech than an essay. And I'd like to say one thing: state your position at the beginning of the piece. I hate reading it and ...

I only skimmed the reviews, but it looks like you got some pretty detailed ones, so I'll just tell you what I thought. This piece was very... random. I don't ...

Okay, so your writing wasn't bad. There weren't any mistakes or issues I could spot, but I have a couple of issues with how you wrote it. This piece was ...

I don't have time for a proper critique, so I'll give you my impressions. This story went way too fast. Slowly it down, break it into chapters. You need more ...

These are really cool. My favourite is the first one. The third one is a bit random, but it still looks cool. I don't really like the third one. There ...

Are you having trouble writing the actual story? Often that's hard. What I do is sit down with a piece of paper and just scribble notes down. When nothing i ...

Sometimes after writing for a bit a good title will just come to me, but if it doesn't I'll usually play a round with a few ideas, and if I ...

I liked this, especially in the beginning. I thought the second bit broke the mood a bit, but it was so good. I can't say a lot about your writing. ...

Hi Alicia (I love your name!) and spike I hope you both have a great time here. Let me know if you ever need any help. See you around! chocoholic.

I agree with the above. It was nice, but it short. I can see this being a prologue, and the story being the longer version of the events. it all ...

I love Agatha Christie! I'm so in (although I'm really bd at these things)!