chocoholic

What perfect timing? I just critiqued the other one to find this! It was longer, which definitely made it better reading. There was no Jamie, though, which annoyed me. I ...

This was really good. I especially liked how yo used what you'd written in the prologue as a part of this. It gives a flashback without it being a proper ...

This is beautiful. I really like it. It's too short for me to really comment on, but I liked how you switched form the characters. I also thought Jamie was ...

First of all, Welcome to YWS! I hope you have a good time here and meet loads of great people (which, of course, you will) Here on YWS we have ...

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To be perfectly honest with you, I didn't enjoy this. It was written very simple, with almost no description or feeling, but you ended it with the worst possible story ...

This was weird and confusing, but very funny at the same time. There was something very appealing about the title, who wouldn't want to read a story named Toothpaste? It's ...

I've been writing since before I could string a proper sentence together. I guess I write because I'm good at it, because it's different to the talents that most other ...

I'm not in the mood to do a full-on review, so I'll just give you my comments (Sorry, post in my lyrics request thread if you want a full review ...

I've been absent from the lyrics forum for a while, and I saw that this song had no critiques, so I jumped straight to fixing that! V1 Please get rid ...

I have a bunch of pictures from flickr for my new contest, but I can't get them to show up on the screen. Does anybody know what to do? chocoholic.

Kara screamed as Jonathan collapsed onto her. Timothy jumped up and grabbed his friend by the shoulders, pulling him onto the floor. "Somebody call an ambulance!" he shouted, ripping open ...

I liked this. Is it true? Going from how it's written, I wouldn't think so. It just sounds very open, and I think that if it were true, there would ...

After your brilliant (and quick) review of Gossip and Lies, I was wondering if you could critique Memo's of Bleeding Hearts? (It's in my portfolio, first under Other) Thanks, and ...

*Breaths a sigh of relief* I was very scared about what I was going to read here, but it actually wasn't too bad. I think it was more focused on ...