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Have you been eavsdropping on the girls in my school?? Tut, tut. You bad person. But seriously, you have captured the 'bitchy teenage girl' thing soooo well. The only thing ...

This was nice. I liked seeing it from Corrie's POV. Didn't exactly like how you showed the dialouge. It just didn't seem like a diary entry to me. Otherwise it ...

Hey! Another great chapter. I'm still a little confused about what this guy did to Vivi? Mind explaining? Otherwise I loved it. I get what you mean about the taping ...

This was beautiful. Sad, but beautiful. It made me was to cry. I love your description of winter and the snow. You make it sound lovely. 'Crystal never knew eyes ...

I don’t go to school on Monday, or Tuesday, or Wednesday. But I was better by Thursday, and mum allowed me to go back to school. “How are you feeling?” ...

This is short, but it didn't take me long to write. I hope you like it. Please tell me what you thought. I lined up with the other contestants. We ...

Definetly short, but I liked it. This chapter was straight to the point, but had enough emotion in it to make you feel sorry for the girl. Update soon!

So this chapter wasn't just for me. Aw... I'm sad now. But It was great. There's no way you're not finishing this story! I want it completed or you will ...

Yay! This chapter was just for me! No one else read it, it's just for me! Anyway, this was really good. I love how she's different with her friends and ...

This was sweet. I didn't expect what happened in the end. I thought the woman was just the wind.

This was a random piece. I liked it. But I had no idea where it was going. Maybe you should try and make that more clear in future. Also, there ...

Nice. It was sweet and funny. I liked it better than I liked the first one. I loved th last line. Is there more coming?

This was good. There wa sonly thing I didn't like. In the first paragraph you say that it's a two story house twice. I think this is un nessacary. Otherwise ...

It was short and breif, which I thought made it really good and interesting. You only skimmed the surface. Going into detail may have ruined it. I think there was ...

This was interesting. I don't really read much fantasy, but from the little fantasy stories I've read, this was really cool.