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  • Fiction Discussion Re: Anybody write in second person?

    I wrote a story for an assignment in second person. I don't know how it turned out because it was my first try and my teacher hasn't given it back ...

    Jun 6, 2007
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Those Eyes

    Interesting concept. I understand where this girl is coming from. I haven't moved schools, but when I start a new ater-school activity or something I feel like this. Plus I'm ...

    Jun 6, 2007
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Don't Blink

    This was very brief. Sometimes I've found that it can be good in a story, but I don't think it seemed to work in this one. It probably would have ...

    Jun 6, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Next Chapter part 2.

    This was very different from Dear Diary. So why did April kill herself? I like it how you've got Jo writing letters to her dead friend. I'm not sure if ...

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Dear Diary

    This was interesting and really funny. I don't really get why everyone hates her, she seems to just a normal girrl, but whatever. I liked it. It's coll how you ...

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Isabella

    Generally speaking, I liked this story, but I did notice some things: The great force of the wind almost thrust Isabella over the edge of the cliff I don't really ...

    Jun 5, 2007
  • Other Poetry Re: Oathbroken

    Erm... I'm sorry but I wasn't really sure what you were supposed to be saying. There seems to be a lot of older words in there, so maybe that's why.

    Jun 5, 2007
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Train Station

    I wrote this at school after a burst of inspiration. I hope you like it. I’m sitting at a train station The hectic mother and her kids push past the ...

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lyla. Part 6

    I liked the flashback, but I didn't like much else. I hope you update, because I'm sure it will get better.

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lyla part 5

    Another great chapter, but for some reason I liked other ones more than this one. Oh well, I'll go and read chapter six now.

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lyla. Part 4

    Ooh... she was protected! Cool. I love how you have a flashback in each chapter. I will go and read number 5 now!

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lyla. Part 3

    Yes! I knew it! She's pregnant! I think this is a really cool story. Please update it soon.

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lyla. Part 2.

    Nice cliffy. I only noticed one mistake. You wrote loose. It's actually lose. Again, is she pregnant?

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Lyla. Part 1

    Nice. Is she pregnant?

    Jun 5, 2007
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Moving Too Fast (Chapter 3)

    I know this chapter is shorter, but I wasn't really sure what else to add. “Here’s the album,” Ray says to me, handing me the new 50 Cent album. “Just ...

    Jun 5, 2007


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