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Hey. I loved the story. The plot was very interesting, but there are a few mistakes I can point out. You change tenses a lot. It makes the story confusing ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I hope you have fun here. If you want a critique or you have a question or just want to chat, feel free to PM me. ...

Right now I'm working on chapter eight of a 25 chapter novel. I'm writing on paper, and I will be typing it all up after I finish. I don't have ...

I'm not really sure where to put this- so I thought writing activities would be a good place. Tandem writing is where you email a story back and forth, each ...

Well... I really have no idea what to put here, so I'll start off with some basics. Name: Rosie Age: 13 Year: 8 Country: Born in England, live in Aus ...

Is anybody on this site writing to get published? Like, maybe you're not posting it here, ut you're writing it and hoping it will get published? I was... I actually ...

I've reached a dead end with my current novel, so I've decided to begin research and planning for another. It's a diary of a girl living in Australia during the ...

I used to teach myself Spanish, and I got really good. But I stopped and forgot everything. But seeing as there's nothing absolutely have to do, I'm planning on starting ...

Hello little sis! Hope you have fun on YWS! (You will be coming on here regularly. I will only get off the laptop if you agree to go on... I ...

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Not asian, maybe from another land. To me they don't sound as if they work very hard, and has light brown hair. Alicia Church

It was good. The description was real, and the last bit was funny. The whole thing really put you into the story, and you can see the setting clearly. Cicely ...

Wow! Harry Potter much? No, it's good. I definetely see a lot of Harry Potter in there, but you've added your own creativity. You don't really describe much. We need ...

I am against calling is a diary. To me, a diary is a book where you jot down any appointments or events. I have this book that I call a ...

Okay, I just read the new bit. It was really sweet, the fuss they kicked up about being seperated. You made it very realistic and I could feel the pain. ...