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(Seven years old) “Bye Jose,” I leaned over and kissed Mum on the cheek before jumping out of the car and running into the school. “Dad will pick you up ...

Quiet girl. Asian dad, caucasian mother. Good at art and English, not good at sport or maths. Likes reading or hanging out with her friends. Very trustworthy. Rosa Ellis

I don't have time to do a proper critique because I have to go in a minute, but I really liked the idea of this poem, and with a bit ...

You know I loved you, You know you loved me too. But that can't change the things between us, no. And now it's time to let go. These last two ...

Hey Harmony. 13 you say, well I am 13 too! Now we can be 13 together! If you need any help around the site or you'd like a critique, you ...

Is anybody going to add something to this?

How long do you think it'll be? How much have you written of it?

(Four years old) I stood on the third stair from the bottom and watched Daddy put things in a bag. Mummy was sitting on the couch, crying, and Daddy seemed ...

Hey and welcome to the site. If you like writing and talking about writing, you'll be right at home here. You can PM me if you have any questions, but ...

This was nice. I liked your descriptions, and the idea of having a mute character. I loved the bit where the mother guessed that the girls were laughing about their ...

In my current novel I'm writing about 2500 words per chapter.

Wow! I really don't know what to say. It was intense. Let me think of something that would help you... oh! I know! There seemed to just be a lot ...

I'd do it. I don't care how many novels I write- I have loads of ideas in my little notebook. Maybe if it were in a seperate forum we could ...

A novel about a thirteen yearold girl who lives a seemingly normal life in Melbourne.

Wow! It's an incredibly complex plot and long script. And it's going to get longer! I won't write a huge long critique. I'll just say that I loved it, but ...