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A great start! I don't believe this was your first poem. There are only a couple of things I can say. Pleading. Take me with you she says That needs ...

I think all the previous replies are very valid, so I'm not going to go through all the little spelling and grammar stuff. I'm just wondering how much research into ...

This was a bit short (I'm guessing it's more of a teaser than an entire story) but it looks like the makings of a great novel. I'm also guessing that ...

I'm pretending to still be writing a fantasy novel that I abandoned a year ago and I'm currently actually writing a novel about a runaway child. It's in very early ...