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Fabulous! I loved how your names, speech and descriptions didn't have modern influences. It didn't go too fast or too slow, though it could benefit from some stronger descriptions. “Where ...

This is quite a good story, very well written. Despite all the grammatical errors JabberHut has pointed out (which cuts my review down :x ) I still have something to ...

This sounds nice so far, but you need much more information. Yes, it's a preface, but it needs more detail. The first two paragraphs are told in third person, but ...

This has maintained your standard of excellence. But there were a few grammatical mistakes: The Monday, early morning light pierced through the glass windows, waking up Sophia. You should have ...

This is a great preface - I get information about Sophia, I get suspense, I get the idea as to who the suitors are and I get a great setup ...

How could anyone rip that to shreds? It's an awesome piece of work written by an awesome poet. I like how you compare the subject to the sky and the ...

Fantastic! I love how you didn't turn it into a soppy mopey breakup story, but kept it light and relatively indifferent (not to say there's no emotion, there is!! And ...

Beautiful poem! I'm not sure about a metaphor, but does it mean that if you spend your whole life chasing something it may all be in vain? If so I ...

This is a cute little poem, I like the way it is written. However some of the rhymes are forced. This is my best example: When I was just a ...

This is fantastic! I love how you captured the end of summer in more ways than just the landscape, or just the temperature, or just the birds. It's great how ...

Nice work! This is a really good story. Only a couple of things I can point out. Firstly, yes my main character is called Bella...but I wrote this before I ...

Um... not sure what to think. This is more of a tribute biography type thing, isn't it? He’d turn papers after papers into his teacher who’d return them with a ...

This is a great poem, but I kind of expected it to be more than just a fantasy guy. I was kind of expecting it to be bit more about ...

I'm glad that, instead of going into a giant sonnet of self-pity about losing your friend, you kept the balance between the MC and their friend near mutual. You saved ...

My icon hole is photobucket. Some of them are really lame/emo, but some are quite good. I also visit graphic sites, mostly because my friends own them. Sometimes I even ...