chewy66

Thank you for the advice i think i know what you mean about jack and the police calling you ask your self why are the police calling him in the ...

no dont be sorry thank you for being "harsh" now i know and its hopefully a little bit better now i realy dont know what im doing truthfully im just ...

this is some thing im working on and hopeing to get published durring my timein the navy look it over if you have any corrections at all please let me ...

good stuff i want to read more some little mistakes that could be fixed by proof reading other then that its great

that first example ws from invisible prey by john sandford he has a weird writing style tho and it was messed up cus i typed it fast lol any ways ...

hey man my opinon for you if you have never been to america just go!! get out and experince some thing new and take it in to use it in ...

there not bad as long as you keep it in scene and make sure you just skim over the deep dark details if you know what i mean hit the ...

like here is an example. of another book "weather..." lucas said impatently. "lucas" weather snapped. "look around, if you can get your head out of your but long enofe." letty ...

its a cute little thing i liked it just a little confuseing at first probably cus its so late :)

its realy good the only thing ide do differnt is watch the wording some of the words are kinda mixed up like they dont belong or are not a part ...

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hey guys im perty new here any ways mabey some of you will be able to right im trying to right my first book its going realy well so far ...