chetanbhasin

Great work! You've explained the expressions and mind of your character very well though there are some errors that I will try to help you find out. Here it goes, ...

@Everybody, Thanks retro and mystoryline, as you told me that I should explain it a little more I've put some efforts to edit it and had some time on it. ...

Hey, I shall be your reviewer. This is very action pact, which is good. There seems to be no description however, which makes it seem more like a short story, ...

Quite little but cute poem!

Hello everybody, this is the edited copy of the first chapter of my work. As other reviewers told me that it shouldn't be the prologue I converted it into a ...

Great, it is such a great poem and it is written in first person. I will never forget this one, I will recommend it to all my friends. I never ...

I actually mean to say that this is just too short to be a poem. There should be at least two paragraphs I believe. But for one's interest I would ...

Haha thanks! Yes it is a short poem, because it is supposed to be short and to the point. And yes it is a rhyming poem, just the format doesn't ...

I agree with everybody else who made a review over here. But there are some things that I would like to tell you. First of all, as you already know ...

Doesn't seem like a blurb, it seems good though but there are some things that if you would edit will read better. I will go step by step: Red color ...

Thanks for the review, I've edited some lines to make this poem read more meaningful, pleas tell me if you think I've improved it. Thank you once again

My username is my real name. And there are other names that I like to put as my user name. Like at some website I had my username "underformationpolaris" I ...

Cute cat, nicely taken. They are big, why don't you upload on picasa and post the link over here or just embed the pics in your post rather than in ...

@Pencilgirl, Hello, I understand what you are saying and I admit that this poem is a lot awkward. I wrote this poem when I was a kid and it was ...

Hello possibleintrovert, Good job. You've expressed the emotions of the girl in a very good manner however story seems like 'incomplete'. Also, should be providing more about the main character ...