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Alright, well here we go. ^^ "Damn it Tom will you turn that crap down? I believe you want to put a coma after Tom. =3 She took kids without ...

Thank you Jackie. =3 I appreciate the review, comments, and taking time to read this. I know people will have a lot of questions about my character as well as ...

His height and muscle size seemed almost threatening to me. With my size he could have easily over powered me. What I lacked in muscles, though, I gained in my ...

Hello, my name is Katie. As June told you above, there is a 2:1 ratio. =3 Anyways, time for the review. We were all there- My father, Helena, even my ...

I agree with everyone here. I found little mistakes, but those I did find everyone else found as well. A few of the lines were corny, like others said, but ...

First of, thank you for the review. =3 Anyways... I do have a idea off having her address the audience throughout the story, but I'll keep in mind on changing/removing ...

Maybe it's my lack of experience in reviewing other pieces, but I don't think I found any other mistakes that EmmaJane hadn't covered. Well done over all, the descriptions definitely ...

EDITED. Screams were heard in all directions. I could feel my heart sink as I watched my dad fall to the ground. Blood ran from his neck to the floor. ...

"He's bleeding! Move, get an OR open!" My ears could hear everything that went on around me, but all I was focused on was my father's still body. The bullet ...

I'll just add this here since I rather not make the above post ten times larger than it needs to be. I know this is a long story, but I ...

Note: Here are some important characters, Lionfang, Cindernose, Blackstar, Minnowstar, Harepaw[Harefoot], Sandkit[Sandfang], and Lionkit[Not Lionfang]. None of these cats are from the original warrior

Here I am. =] Note: Most my comments are on the fact that you have present tense, not past. So technically they are suggestions. A glob of strawberry jam slips ...

I like this so far and I'd love to review it. I am going to school soon so I'll review it once I get back. It's a good start, just ...

Negative: I'm not really sure on how to comment on this. Most of it is just kind of confusing and I wouldn't know where to start. Maybe you should read ...

Thank you guys so much. The comments I've received have really helped me with my story and I'm loving it more everyday, if it's even possible. The help with the ...