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Pt. 2 I watched as she slammed the door behind her. Hypocrite, I smirked. I took out my brushes and acrylic paints. If anyone was going to win this competition, ...

Ok here i noticed more grammatical mistakes than last time. Here. "I lifted cupped my hand around one and blew lightly against it. A hiss of pain passed my lips ...

Wow this is even better than the others. And way funnier. She reminds me of Anne of green gables...but thats just my opinion. You may not have read it tho. ...

Hey this is really good. its simply, no info dumps, and clear and straight to the point. I love the angel devil voices n her head. Hilarious. I'm still not ...

tx guys. I wasn't really planning on continuing it cuz i dont have any clue what would happen next but if something comes to mind i'll try and see if ...

omg!! hahahah this is sooo retarded. i dont even get it!! lol. *wipes tear* haha. whooo. and i dont really get what he was saying bout that whole "It is ...

Hey. this is the first time i've ever read anything of yours. This story is really good. there are just a few things that bothered me. He was quite muscular, ...

Hello! This is just a short story i wrote from inspriation. I don't think I'll be continuing it though. But still please critique and give me your thoughts and opinions!! ...

This is literally a piece of magical art. Im serious! The whole feel of the story is so mistifying. No kidding. Its really amazing. As soon as i read it ...

its very intriguing i must say. I like how you let us into her head and imagination. I've never read a story before when the character daydreams in such a ...

Alright. Tx for bein such a devout critiquer. I've been so busy writing and editing the rest of my story i haven't really had time to post. And the next ...

9. Lessons of Medicine Nami bit into a slice of fresh sweet smelling bread which had just come out of the small mud oven. The smell of the food made ...

yea i guess so. tx

1. Complete my first novel 2. Edit, revise, edit, revise! 3. Send it in to a publisher. 4. Get published! 5. Write at least one COMPLETE short story. 6. Enter ...

Omg. I dunno whether to feel revolted or pity. Do u mean all these paintings were hes? im go confused. It was a set up to kill him??