chamberlainj

I must say that this is a mediocre poem, I can tell that you didn't spend along time on it. Just kind of popped in your head so you started ...

The first thing you must never do i take into any mind what those stupid drug hate things say. I'm a completely recovered drug addict, and I'm not that old. ...

The poem is not really impressive, mediocre. It seems to be so forced it lacks flow, and something just seems as if it has a child's tongue(well written non the ...

It seems to be surfaced and well looked. But the fact is with all constructiveness, you didn't really try. You on the facet this seems to be a fascinating piece ...

I'm not much of a critique, mainly because I think constructive criticism is still criticism(I'm not one to care of others feelings much, but I understand pain so I don't.) ...

Eulogy Chrysanthemums line the path I walk As I roam the graveyard at close of day. Wondering if the dead could talk- What have they seen, what would they say? ...

Hey, nice feelings in this thread. It was merely an introduction. And welcome! You have longer hair than me. :P Also - all girls are beautiful! ;) Your a sweetheart, ...

There will come a time when the world will end. The sun-it will not rise again. Men will die with heartless souls, Forgetful of the days of old. Unfortunately, it ...

First off don't apologise for what you have written, you gave it a rating which is all you need to do, trust me, we have seen much darker topics covered ...

Well you see to miss the point here, there is a reason for lack of detail and alot of other things. The point is not about how he would feel ...

Hey there. I read your poem. Want to hear what I think?? :-) Your rhyme was very forced and your rhythm was kind of . . . well, not there. ...

awwww that was absolutely sadnining. It very nicely written though for being horrible, cant you write more peaceful things? I like the you wrote the piece though mimicing the format ...

That girl in the picture That make your eyes flicker And makes the drool run down your chin Every time that you see her You just want to meet her ...

Welcome to YWS, James! :) Have ya read the rules yet? If you haven't, please do. :) Anyway.. Your friend (the guy) seriously looks like one of my friends. The ...

Huh. Nice to meet you. I myself am into the more "written with an actual, ongoing story" thing, but there's nothing wrong with poetry. The lack of apostrophes worries me ...