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I'm not a good nittpicker, so I'm not going to deal with that. But, yeah, intreaging way to think of being original. Original way to think of being original. :) ...

I think everyone else has it covered. Umm... well, I like it, but its kind of repetitive. Not the poem, I know that was intentinal. The idea. Do something little ...

... ... ... ... Wow! Nice. I don't really think I can help you with thins one. Sorry. I like it. *You don't have to answer this question* Are you ...

Yeah, it went by [i]really[i] fast. Detail, detail, detail! Don't forget. Oh... one more thing. DETAIL!!!!!

Whoa, deep. I love it when there's no names, just a story. Backward love story. Love it. Okay... I think the Pluto thing was really original. Oh, one thing... is ...

I thought this title was already taken. Anyway, I think the language could be cleaned up a bit. Was every cuss word nessasary? Other than that and the title, I ...

Please reconsider your word choices. Or use ****

What's with all the old romantic movies? And "diamonds are a girl's best friend"? Well, as a story... it passes.

Sorry for the confusion. I think I cleared it up.

Yeah... the end of the world. I didn't really care. Description. Or make the story longer, to make the reader care.

Really, really rushed. Emotion and detail could spread that out to the lenght of say... a page. You never know. I like how their not really named. Their just... there. ...

Wow, not you're typical love song. Not a broken heart. A waiting heart.

Sorry, I'm used to story formats. Thanks for the feedback, though. ;)

I felt your eyes on me, lingering on my face. But I didn't know why. I was normal, with brown hair that hung around my shoulders, and nothing special about ...

I really like it. Interesting. Do you think you could put it in a poem format, though?