catchafallingstar

*Controls emotions* This is a really good poem! The way you brought the original memory back at the end with a bittersweet tone that contrasted with the brighter tone of ...

This is beautiful! It is seems so lighthearted yet it really pulls on your heartstrings and creates a very realistic image of your feelings. The end rhymes create a lot ...

Thank you,I apologize for the trouble the slider bars caused!

Thank you for taking the time to review my poem! I did not originally want the sliding bars but I really liked them and kept them, apologize that it was ...

Thanks!The sliding bar wasn't supposed to happen but it did and then I really liked it so I kept it!

Thank you!!! The whole "I love you, I need you, I don't care etc. was to show how we (as humans) have so many emotions that clash and bounce off ...

Thanks!

Thank you! The slider thing was not meant to happen but I left it.

Thanks! I would have it in stanzas and have more punctuation to create the impact.

This is absolutely beautiful! It flows really well and the wording is so flawless. The third stanza is especially moving with the probable wishes of the children. The imagery is ...

I liked the description and the flow really made it deep,moving and haunting. What I really loved was the fact you didn't tell who was narrating until the end which ...