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[Sirith] Sirith stiffened, her smell was too close, her skin brushing his. He panicked, trying to escape, but her hands gripped his arms tightly. Holding his breath and closing his ...

[Sirith] Sirith's eyes went wide, wondering if she would really do as she threatened. He pursed his lips for a moment, then shook his head. She shrugged and he flinched ...

[Sirith] Sirith blinked rapidly, surprised by her sudden friendliness and leaned back when she came in closer. He breathed again when she leaned back, and studied her begging eyes carefully. ...

[Sirith] Sirith chanced a look at Sam, feeling strangely calm. She doesn't look all that much like Naomi... he decided, then blinked abruptly. Why should he care what she looked ...

[Sirith] Sirith stared straight ahead, willing himself not to even glance at Sam. She looked too much like Naomi, but too different at the same time. The severed hand he ...

I don't have time for an in-depth critique, sorry! But I can offer some advice: 1)Show, don't tell: Instead of saying Lexy loved soccer, she wore blablabla... Show us! If ...

Banned for not explaining your username. banned for taking the words out of my mouth!

[Sirith] Sirith watched sadly as his imaginary Naomi faded into sand. He stretched out a bloodstained hand and scooped up a handful, but it sifted through his fingers like regular ...

[Dierik] Dieirik stood motionless for a moment, processing the information. Then he laughed at himself, he had jumped as eagerly as a cabin boy! But then, his hopes were high, ...

[Sirith] Sirith stared up at Naomi, confused and surprised, surely she only came here to apologize. To tell him that things are the way they are and he'd have to ...

[Sirith] Sirith chucked the dagger of wood he was still holding at Tex, not really caring if it hit him or not, and raced inside. He stormed into his room, ...

[Dierik] Dierik was leaning out over the edge of the railing when Toribrio's island came into view. Straightening immediately, he turned and shouted up at Captain Raphael, "Cap'n! Toribrio's...!" But ...

[Sirith] Sirith stood up in shock. Was that Naomi's voice? He held his breath, turning around slowly. And there she was. The love of his life, the only one who ...

banned for using 'chatspeak' (ur) in your siggy O.O lol

banned for being afraid of a little tiger slobber! :roll: