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Thank you all for the comments. First of all, every single run-on is intentional. The idea is that the main character is not in the most stable place mentally and ...

He told me he was in love with me, and I told him to go to hell. he told me he would spoil me, would buy me CDs when he ...

Most people can complain about awkward moments where they found themselves uncomfortably close to someone’s face for the first time. The trend is often the earlier one can get their ...

This is in NO ORDER AT ALL. So if it seems that some parts do go in order, it's a lie. This is just the order I got the words ...

There were a lot of errors, most of which got pointed out, but those are easily fixed. However, it really seems like there is absolutely no point to this. While ...

The idea was to be highly repetitive, and I didn't want any specific character with this. It was more of a style experiment than anything.

I think it is quite good however what does 'first drink' really represent. Is it the first exposure to alcohol or is it the first drink that causes your emotions ...

Once I've written something more solid about the character, I will definitely add it here, and probably include bits and pieces of this within that. I haven't done a good ...

Thank you. :) I'll be sure to, especially anything like this.

Midnight and all was quiet, go figure the one night I decided to volunter for my partner Jax and nothing of importance was going on. (Volunter should be volunteer. This ...

It's a nice description and a fairly interesting take on alcohlism, but I must argue whether that first drink is really that special for anybody who drinks. I mean, considering ...

Thanks for the suggestions. :) I'm not sure how much more I'm going to do with this... Unless I completely rewrite it, I might just decide that it's too frustrating ...

There is a moment after that first drink hits, a moment in which you feel like you can do anything. That first drink is just enough to save you from ...

This actually caught my attention perfectly, I was incredibly interested. I think I was worth more than that. This should possibly be either "I think I am," or (and probably ...

the reference to the anti-drug campaigns. why would they joke that their loved one looked like a crack addict? Not to get overly defensive or to automatically assume that you're ...