carelessaussie13

Hey there, Your story is sweet. It's something you could turn in for a school assignment about your earliest memory and get an 'A', but it doesn't really have its ...

Hi there. I like this. I like the idea of Abbie and Gabrielle, but something seems weird. It's like this was destined to happen. But there's absolutely no conflict in ...

one quick question: I didn't get how the title related to the poem. I loved the first line. Your rhyme scheme was a tad random. Not bad, though.

I think it's fascinating. I haven't really seen any of the movies, but I read Cormack McCarthy's The Road and I loved it, and since then I've been sort of ...

I tired of the world. It no longer interested me. The things that once consumed me seemed shallow, meaningless. I was lost on a one-way street, choking on the dust ...

Hi there Sydney, Guess what? My name is Sydney, too. Weird, right? Anyway. A few technical things, and then I'll say something about the whole. 1. Your rhyme scheme shifted ...

Hey there, This is... this is... I would definitely shorten the lines. Also, I'm not really sure why you wrote this. Anyone can write about what's around them: a library, ...

In my opinion, poems of this nature have more oomph when they're in the present tense. I'm talking about the first two lines. Also, you might want to consider putting ...

Hey there! Um, I give it a 3 out of 5. I like the subject matter. On one hand, there really aren't enough poems about things that matter, like what ...

Hey there! While I see the appeal of the poem and the woman of darkness, I think you could take this to a whole new level with a bit of ...

I disagree with Snoink. I think you've got a bit of s Shel Silverstein thing going on here. Funny, light-hearted, but at the same time an expression of your frustration ...

Hmm. I mean, Hi! Review time! It's clear that a lot of emotion went into your poem, so I don't want to appear insensitive when I say that it could ...

hey there! Um, I actually disagree with dancingclouds on the underlining/italics thing. Every time I hit either one of them I had to scowl and think, "Seriously?" before I went ...

and and and the truck started with a rumble and it shook us in our sears - we exchanged smiles - and we were off! and it was the beginning ...

Hi there! I'm going to be reviewing your poem today... Here's the thing: I didn't care about the little girl. You kept telling me she's sad, she's pessimistic but not ...