carelessaussie13

Everything is awesome, but I'd like to add one small crit. In the beginning you said that Zinthia was the cutest girl in the world, and half a paragraph later ...

I was never bold enough To try my luck. I hung back, Waiting for others To test the waters, Longing for the initial chill Of knowing that I did that, ...

A lot have been saying I stole the idea from someone else, and I'm afraid you might be right. I wrote this from something my mom always said to me ...

The wind whips long red marks across her back. The sky turns its gray face from her, angry. The earth grinds to a halt and rotates the other way. The ...

Very good job, and I have one small crit. The line and the sun never stops, seems to be a little off to me. Even just changing it to 'always ...

I have spent a lot of time of farms, and I'm sure a lot of people reading this have, too, but the stuff you see there is totally different from ...

I have this story in which a girl is sitting in an inn, alone and sad. Nothing is really happening and somehow I need to hook the audience. I have ...

Five dollars for an opening line, Ten for a whole story. Pay me up front, I’ve had too many fall through. Pick your genre, Cliches are an extra dollar, Sci-fi ...

I agree with everything everyone before me has said, but I'd like to add one more thing. The use of "Because if not" is a little too repetitive. I'm really ...

I prowl the night Waiting. I am not cruelty; I am not greed. I am just death. I do not take What is not mine. I do not cause hurt ...

Awesome job, but may I suggest punctuation?

Very good poem, but there are some things that could be reworked. For instance, you could work in some other senses besides sight. Maybe the you can small the salty ...

“How far is it to the moon?” she asks. You look down at the top of her head. “A long ways, my love,” you say. She turns and gazes up ...

His heart pounds He fights for breath. He has been running Running forever. No, not running, Just afraid, As if he has been running. His mouth tastes Of copper, and ...

People have commented about not gettng it, but I think that was kind of the point. I don't know much about dyslexia, but I think it's basically when the dyslexic ...