carelessaussie13

The verses that worked (1 and 3) were really, really good. I especially likes the first stanza. But then you got off track in your rhyme on the second one, ...

I wrote this poem at around seven in the morning, when I realized that all my mornings start with the exact same routine, down to the minute I get downstairs. ...

In the year 2006, Al Gore came out with a film called An Inconvenient Truth. I myself am a big fan of horror movies, but this one in particular left ...

The Revealers is a book for younger kids, I read it as an English assignment in sixth or seventh grade. It's about these three kids who are picked on for ...

Animals are a waste of time and space, except for horses. My horse Jima is my only friend in the world, and without her I'd die. ----Misty What adjectives would ...

This is a very good poem but a few things seemed off to me. The comparison between the bubbles and this person's life seemed to obscure; I would just stick ...

I wrote this as a school assignment when we read "The Revealers" a few years ago in English. It is sort of childish but I think its okay. Don't go ...

"making my heart race, Not your face." What? That doesn't make sense.

This was very good, but it seemed to stretch on too long with the same idea, which, by the way, is a good idea. It needs something to capture the ...

It really conveyed the empty feeling of loss while at the same time being totally full of rick detail like chocolate melting on your tongue. Kodos.

kindergarteners

I had a dream I was trying to canoe uphill in the maze of streams that doesn't actually exist behind my summer camp. At some points there were five people ...

um. . .either this poem has some deep (very deep) meaning or I'm stupid. No offense, this poem sounds like something a third grader wrote when his teacher said "write ...

On that slide I lost my second tooth. On that swing, my best friend told me that boogers taste like salty chocolate and made me try some, and over there, ...

You seem to be a prizoner to your own rhyme, as if you just wrote the second or fourth line of some stanzas simply because you needed something to rhyme ...