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Hi! I'm Aussie, nice to meet you! Hmmm . . .I get what you're saying here. I think we all get what you're saying her, because we're all writers. But ...

Hi! I'm a big Mary Oliver fan myself, and I guess I can say I'm a pretty big fam of you now too because I really liked your poem here. ...

Hmm . . . I like a lot of your visuals. I like your theme, too, that sometimes the wrong choice can be the right choice. Your rhyme seemed a ...

Lorraine leans against the wall in the girls’ dressing room, which doubles as a greenroom and is therefore double the disaster. “Shit,” she says. “I can’t believe our dress rehearsal’s ...

Morning, Penny decides, is no time to concentrate on walking attractively. Anyone who might raise an eyebrow over an eight o’clock waddle clearly doesn’t need to be listened to in ...

This, my friend, is a classic case of a little something I like to call poem-squinching. This means that you're trying to squish a beautiful, expansive poem into this tight ...

Edits/Comments/Suggestions in red It kills me inside knowing, (remove comma, remove "inside") All that he is (try "How beautiful he is) And feeling, how none of it belongs to me. ...

Hmm . . . well, it's pretty, that's for sure, but pretty doesn't necessarily make a good poem. I don't get what it means, either. It seems like the first ...

Saturday, June 21, 2008 Rae The old barn, creepy enough even in broad daylight, seemed crawling with mystery in the glow of a flickering candle. The barn stuck out like ...

So recently I got interested in the alphabet and what it means. If you go back to Greece, each letter had a meaning, and a bunch of other cultures, ancestors ...

Hi! I'm Aussie and I think I've read your poems before. . .which brings me to critiquing your poem. It was lovely, don't get me wrong. I really liked it. ...

Hmmm. . .first impressions: nearly perfect! Second impression: nearly perfect, but here are some things to think about. First line. I don't actually think "unthought of" is grammatically correct, but ...

I really liked this. Really. It's totally my family. One thing I think you might want to look at is saying something about why and how the shift between hostility ...

Very good. Pat yourself on the back. My only thing was the exclamation point at the very end. We're generally smart people, we'll get that it's a funny line. Generally, ...

Hmmm. . . pretty. I liked it. But I have to say, I got a little too carried up in the rhythm. I think that in a poem of this ...