carameldreams

Thanks for the review I can be rather bad when it comes to spelling i actually dont think i have published anythin with out a mistake to be honest so ...

You can’t see peace, only hate Its all resting on the shoulders of your name You can’t see truth, only lies You can only see the world through troubled eyes ...

I reallly like this. It just simple and nice. I enjoyed reading it seems to have a nice flow and I think you have done a good job!

I want you to understand Good first lie I want you to touch my hand with your hand. I really like this line it really made me feel warm Because ...

I realy like this poem and too have to disagree with the first two comments. I think the poem reads really well and its a very dark and scary poem ...

I realy like this poem very well done. All I would say is that it seemed to drag on so many just change the structre because it made it abit ...

He's there he's there I feel him everywhere I want to run Coz' I just know i just know They say look around theres no one to be found But ...

brill that mate

I lie here in this dreaming state. Too often had I tempted fate. nice start i really like the opening you have already got me trapped like a rapist and ...

Thanks pop nice to know someone likes it :) and yeah i will make them changes thanks for the advice!

Amazing! I really like this poem i was actually excited reading it. Keep up the good work and i look foward to reading more of your stuff

OMG damn your talented and only 16 you seem to have so much awerness of the world but still manage to keep your vulnerability. You amaze me and i think ...

Ive been walking too long Down this road all alone What was I thinking You messed up my mind Im confused all the time We shouldnt be mixing You ruined ...

well thanks again to everyone for the advice and I will add a couples of verses to it and hopefully it will then make more sense and by the why ...

Thank for the advice