captaindomdude

Well, if you wanted to portray your character as an asshole, you suceeded in that regard. I enjoyed the complete utter disrespect he showed to everything around him, as if ...

I really don't know a whole lot about computers. So your questions are a lot of help. I have to think about it more, but i think I can figure ...

I....I don't even know how to describe the amazingness I just read. That was fantastic. Truly. You have a truly original plot. You have truly amazing characters. The setting you ...

Thanks, I guess I need to post more information The A.I isn't really made out of anything, it is portrayed as a grandmother sitting in a room, and it only ...

Alright, I'm stilll fairly new here, but my understanding is that this is a fairly friendly community. Which means I won't feel really stupid posting this. I'm working on a ...

Much better, your portrayal of the main character is greatly improved from the last chapter. She shows much more emotion, and I get a much better idea of what kind ...

Chapter 1 The red light at the chamber’s base began blinking as the last fail safe protocol activated. In the event that any and all power fails, the chamber will ...

Enjoying the story so far, you are progressing and portraying the story very well, and I find myself wanting to know more of the story. What's going on, who were ...

Excellent work, you perfectly executed the job of a writer, which was to make your reader lose themself in the location and what's happening. I could imagine the area you ...

Outstanding work. Truly enjoyed reading it, you conveyed the fear of it perfectly. Your imagery and words made me think that if I had that dream, I'd probably wet myself. ...

I liked the story premise, it's a good idea. The plot progressed well, but I felt you implimented it badly. The story was -kinda blocky and hard to read, the ...

I understand that this topic isn't completely original, but hopefully as the story progresses I won't inadvertantly plagerize someone else. Prologue The gurney wheel squeaked as it rolled down the ...