canislupis

I'm not sure I completely understand what you're asking, but here goes anyway. What needs to happen (from what I see) is that a) He needs a reason to go ...

I agree with Rosey to some extent, except the second question--I think its a lack of logic, actually, or the ability to relate certain things with eachother in ways others ...

*applauds* Amen! :D

I would be happy to read through it and give a general opinion--don't really have time for a full critique, but I could definitely give some general comments if you'd ...

Here is a good link on negative affects of divorce. Here is another one. Hope I helped! Lupis

I'm not sure about how to help you with this, but I thought I'd mention that "abdomen" needs to be changed as that means stomach in English, lol. (unless that's ...

Well, I'm late. But I'm joining! Going for 50,000 yet again this year. It'll be my.... *counts* fifth Wrimo novel, though only my second Julno. Current Wordcount: A big fat ...

If there were two "l"s, I'd say meh-llen, but now I'm seeing my-len.

Thanks, Suzanne! I'm not at all offended--and I agree completely. I think I'll edit it as soon as I get the chance--especially about the cliffhangers. I don't think my meaning ...

5 Steps to Create Tension and Suspense in Fiction Narratives Suspense is one of the most powerful driving forces in fiction, and when used correctly, will keep readers turning pages ...

Run-on sentences are without a doubt one of the most common grammatical errors here on YWS, and no wonder, for not many people even know what they are or how ...

Hope you had fun traveling. ;) It's too late for me to come up with any advice now, since you already left, but please let me know if you have ...

Your vs. You're happens to be both my pet peeve and one of the most common grammatical mistakes on YWS. Every time I see something like "That was great! Your ...

I agree with Rosey. :) Generally speaking, a prologue is something that takes place at a different point on the story's timeline or in a different place than the actual ...

I'm not sure where you got this idea, almost all the books that I've read that have mind readers are girls. Not only in books but in comics, movies etc. ...