canislupis

thanks everybody, for the reviews. Kyte:You'll see! This is the prologue, and I didn't want all of it to make sense. Azila: thanks for the review! I'll keep your suggestions ...

Thanks! I actually meant for this to be a first chapter to something, but I only wanted to post this. I guess I was just trying to cram everything into ...

This is just the first part. Please review! If people like it I will post the first chapter. [EDIT] You can get to it here: Prologue She ran, faster and ...

This was better than the first..... but not that much better. The first half is different, and less confusing, with better descriptions. However, half the stuff that reviewers pointed out, ...

This piece I found extremely hard to read, so I can't give an in-depth review. I think you should move this back to standard format, instead of the weird fancy ...

This is slightly better, but like kitty15 said, not THAT much different. You still have a big problem with spelling, grammar, and punctuation. If you just type this into a ...

this is annoying. I find some stuff that I didn't like, and then I see that the reviewers before me have taken care of all of it. Anyway, good work! ...

This was well written, and I agree almost completely with your point. However, I don't think that everyone needs to be nice just for the sake of it. I don't ...

HI! I have to say I can see your point about critiques. However, not all of us are grumpy people who take delight in putting down other people's work. If ...

Creepy! Anyway, I really liked this. But.... I found that the descriptions are run on sentences in some parts of this piece, and it also kind of gets meandering and ...

This was pretty good, and as a fan of the harry potter series, I like to read this kind of stuff. However, other than the mistakes already pointed out, There ...

This was pretty good. I don't have any comments on the actual story, but in the writing I couldn't help but notice that there are question marks everywhere. In the ...

This was good! I don't have any comments for the grammatical or spelling side, and the other reviewers have pretty much taken care of what I found. Third person would ...

this was so so, but from the start it ave me an impression almost of a doodle. For the size of the lines, it's way to big, and the border ...

This was okay, but like the other reviewers said, it needs a little clarification. I didn't find any grammar mistakes other than the ones gadi already pointed out, so good ...