canislupis

You're right that this could be considered offensive by some, but I didn't think it was that bad. You definitely do need to space it out more. This new "true ...

First off, I really liked the way your descriptions make it come to life, your imagery is excellent. Nature is very beautiful, and I like the idea of making a ...

I sort of liked it, but they did a pretty awful job with the movie. I liked how they did the characters though.

Ok, this was alright, but it seems like it was written in a hurry ,and has numerous problems. This new true blue thing makes it hard to read, and I ...

Interesting. Your prologue promises a fascinating and intriguing story. There isn't much to comment on, but I mostly agree with the other reviewers. The setting could use more description, since ...

Thanks azila. You review was very helpful. I'll keep your suggestions in mind when I edit. I think I'll wait to post the next bit until I get another reply ...

Thanks! Now, this is muuuuch better. :) I have to say that I found it confusing in the beggining. First you are talking about something that is happening, but then ...

Ok, I have a question. What where you trying to achieve with this piece? Are you trying to spread the word about how bad smoking is? I kinda agree with ...

This was pretty good. He does look a little feminine but the colors are great and you're much better at drawing hands and faces than I am. However, His head ...

Ok, very good for starters. I found this piece intriguing and fascinating, and it could go really far. However, for every paragraph you have, there could almost be a page. ...

Most of the errors I found have already been pointed out. I really like the idea, the whole taking over microsoft thing. However, This was full of grammatical errors, and ...

I liked this, but found it very confusing. You keep switching back and forth from samuel, to dr. rees, to other characters. The actual story line was good, I liked ...

Iliked this better as a sunflower, but as Misty said, do sunflowers have thorns?????? anyway, it's better like this.

This was incredibly random, and slightly confusing. Platypi are cool, but I doubt that they would make good pets. Did you know they have a poisonous spur behind their front ...

Please see "prologue" before reading this.The link is here: I wrote this for NaNo. I did get 50k, but I haven't really gotten past that stage of editing... (That is, ...