canislupis

Yes, I think you should continue it. I was intrigued. I, for once, have almost nothing negative to say. Your description is good, dialogue is smooth, characters are interesting. I ...

Wow. I didn't get that she was looking in a mirror till the end. How did she punch the mirror without breaking it?

I don't even see a piece of blank paper. Really! The picture didn't load for some reason.

Wow! I liked this. However, I was confused as to what kind of um, creature i your MC is. I was preparing myself to be shocked at the end when ...

Good Job! I liked this. Like gadi said, there really isn't that much to critique on, but for just two lines you really got your message across. It actually almost ...

Wow! this was ok for a first story. Your plot is truly fascinating. But, you have numerous spelling and grammar mistakes throughout. If you edit your story thuroughly, then more ...

Wow, this was really good. Most of the errors I found have already been pointed out. I have to say I really liked this. The emotion felt very real, and ...

Ahh, I think I understand better now. This is really interesting. There was a bit of info drop in some places, and I also found your grammar to be a ...

HAHAHAHA! Very unexpected. I don't really have any negative comments for this, I loved it.

Oytinna? I had never heard of anything like that, but maybe I was going into shock, hallucinating. I didn't reply to her words, thinking that if I ignored her long ...

I could give a complete crit on this, but it would take a while. I also think that perhaps it should be moved to non-fiction? It also was confusing grammatically. ...

Hi! Sounds like we have a lot in common. :) I've also thought about trying to become a veterinarion, but I'm not sur eif that's what I want to do ...

I like your idea, but this could use some work. It felt like a history book up until about the third paragraph, where it started to get better. I also ...

This is much better now. I have one problem, and that is: What period in history were you planning for this to take place? When I first read it, I ...

This was good, the ending was creepy. You did the younger sister very well, but Vyla could use some work. The was you use her dialogue, she sounds a bit ...