canislupis

Hmmm, I like the way you took an idea, and wrote about it. I'm not sure I liked the fact that there was so much swearing, since it isn't really ...

Wow! Me likey!!!!!! I really enjoyed reading this. It was a bit slow in the beginning, but after about the third paragraph, you really got me interested. Maybe elborate more ...

Hmmm.. Sam pointed out the problems with your storyline as far as I can tell, but there are also some other problems tht have to do do with spelling, grammar ...

Yum! that was good. Very nice setting and descriptions. You get a very nice picture in your head reading this. MORE! MORE! MORE! MORE!

Loved it ! I really like your imagery and descriptions. I look forward to reading more poetry by you.

Hey! I'm a vegitarian two!!!!! I'm also about 25% irish :) I used to dance alot, but I stopped last year......... Anyway, nice to meet you!

Hmm, pretty good! needs a good edit, but I liked the plot. A question I had: Why did he put the body in the dumpster? Also, I don't particularly like ...

Definitely needs to be moved to nonfiction. This section is for historical FICTION. This is more like an article or report. It seems like you're design is completely informative. But, ...

Wow. I liked this... sortof. There was a whole lot of telling, and not a lot of showing. First he did this, then he did this, and then after that ...

Oops, yeah, I didn't get that. Reading it again, I see how it is, but it is still confusing. Sorry about that! :)

Hmmm. Your imagery is excellent, descriptions are perfect. I agree with Amelia though.

Hmm, again, I liked this. One thing I noticed was that you switched from first person to thrid person in the last paragraph. I also found the dialogue to be ...

Hmmm, I liked this. I agree with Kitty..... mostly. I actually didn't care for the first paragraph much, it was to straightforward. (I am this, I am that) But other ...

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! Not sure where you got the idea for this, but it was really good! The only negative point was that you seem to use their names a lot. (Lolly ...

It was dark. Looking around, everything was rubble. The entire place lay in ruins, buildings had crumbled. Walls were completely destroyed, and the water beds dried out. The plants, brown ...