canislupis

umm, yeah. There are some major issues with this, and not the least of which have been pointed out. But besides that, I found myself reading through quickly, and not ...

HI! First off, I really liked this. Before I get into line by line things, I was going to ask if you have seen my contest. I think that this ...

Wow, this is...... slightly random??? Anyway, I don't really have anything to say about weridly colored animals, except commenting on how odd this post is. :) My username is an ...

Well, once again all the line by line things have been taken care of. YOu have an excellent and promising idea hear, but as it has already been said, it ...

I really like your idea, but it definitely definitely needs some work. You did a very good job disturbing, as has already been said. :) Plotwise, it didn't feel like ...

I liked this a lot. Your character's emotions seem to be genuine, and I got a really good feeling for the action and tense parts of the piece. As I ...

Hey! This is much less confusing when individual pieces are numbered. The line-by-line stuff seems to have been taken care of, so I guess I'll get down to what I ...

Perhaps it is a bit repetative, but you did get feeling across and you accomplished what you set out to do pretty well. Other than that, I agree with what ...

Ok, I liked your idea, But I have a few comments, as well as agreeing almost completely with borg. You DO have quite a few tense problems which is something ...

I agree with, quote "ئ twit ئ" . :) (and those symbols are purty by the way) Anyway, I like your idea. It needs some work though. I think there ...

Hi Misty! Good beginning. I don't usually like reading fantasy stories for the reason that they are either stupidly cliche, or boring in that the characters are perfectly good or ...

Wow! I really enjoyed reading this. (Bye the way, I am writing this from a blackberry, so bear with me) First off, this definitely has some strengths. Good description, with ...

Ha ha! Azila will get the joke :) Thank you for the review.

Henna poisonous? that's a problem..... though I don't see how it can be worse than having paint in you body pemanently...... anyway, it's cool about the languages. I am learing ...

OOOH! gruesome. I agree with muffin :) Definitely more description, and more originality. I definitely want to see how this is continued, since it did feel exciting. I also found ...