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Wow, this was very nice. Definitely an interesting plot-twist, I liked it. :D Are you using Word to write this? If so, then it would be very easy to fix ...

Oh, Yeah I see that. I didn't mean to say paddock, but since I was really tired.... :D Anyway, I was saying that they probably wouldn't just let the horse ...

Wow, I seem to have gotten behind with this. I seen to have found quite a few errors,which is something you need to take care of. Aside from that, plotwise ...

Thanks! Any suggestions on how to smooth out the beginning?

Very nice! This story keeps getting better and better. I like the way you are posting pictures of the horses on here, since it does give us a very nice ...

Very nice! I liked this as much as the first one, if not better. :D I really like that you are still writing from Nightmare's perspective, and the whole thing ...

I see. :D Well, it might be plausible, but I think to make it more beleivable, you might want to take out the part with other stallions in the herd. ...

Yes, I agree. This was amazingly scary, and I am now going to have nightmares for a month. :D It was a little choppy in the beggining, but nothing you ...

AAAAAAHHH! I think my mouse just moved. :lol: Very Very Very nice. :) Some tense problems and minor punctuation errors, but nothing serious. All in all a very engaging and ...

This was pretty good, but I feel that there is definitely room for improvement. :D I only have a few comments, so here they are. :) First of all, you ...

I gather that this is a preview you got somewhere, and not your own writing? I think I would make this a bit more clear. :lol: so the last one ...

Wow. First off, I really have to say that this is reallly a nice piece of writing, and really the stuff I like to read. :D Also, have you seen ...

Hi! First off, I absolutely LOVE you avatar. Your story is well written, though I found that you used long words excessively. Though this does show us how big your ...

Hey, thanks azila. I'll get to the errors when I get this stupid cast off. :) About the paragraphs, I do agree that they are huge. Thanks for the tip!

Hey, this is the last part of chapter 1. please look at the prologue and the first part of this chapter before reading this. I realize that this needs a ...