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Wow, That WAS long. ;) I agree with Sumi about the originality part, but I think this was pretty well written, and it flowed nicely. With something of this lenghth, ...

Hmm, Very nice!! I had a good feeling of suspense and there was excellent description. I will be working on an in-depth critique, which I will try to post some ...

Wow thanks, and thats a good idea about the contest... I'll just work out the kinks first... This was helpful, thanks again.

Wow! We have a lot in common. I also swim and would like to horseback ride, but again, the place I am living does not permit it. :D Whats your ...

Thank you! Overall, this was not my favorite piece of work. :) Just kindof an interesting idea that popped into my head. Thanks for the review! (Oh, and fro future ...

Hmm, thanks! I'll keep those suggestions in mind.

Smooth, that flowed very nicely. I don't really have anything negative to say, I like your idea and it was delivered very well. I got the message clearly, and it ...

Wow, It's nice to get in touch with you again. Very nice idea here, I was intrigued. Quite a few minor tense issues, which should be taken care of. THe ...

Sorry for the slightly stereo-typic versions of my characters, I can't come up with anything better right now. Anyway, here it is, and helpful comments would be appreciated! ____________ Harsh ...

Hmm, I think prokaryote got most of the technical issues covered. It started out a bit rough, though it definitely smoothed out towards the ending. Very nice portrayal of emotion, ...

Hah, I guess that is the problem with sharing a name with a season. :) Any suggestions on how to clear it up?

This is nice, but I agree with Ayra. One other thing I noticed was the rather obvious way you are describing things. Here is one example: "Congradulations! It's a boy!" ...

HAHA!!!! This was really funny. THe one complaint I have is that there are quite a few grammatical errors throughout, which is something worth fixing. Something about the colors is ...

I want to live there too. :D Very moving and original, I really liked the voice. The emotions portrayed are very realistic, and overall I think you did a very ...

OOH! You're right, I DID switch tenses, I just noticed. AHA! I will go and edit when I have time. Thanks alot! I guess it's because I'm not used to ...