canislupis

Hmm, the plot is developing. :) I don't have much time today, so this should be short. ;) I like the idea of him having conversations with himself, but something ...

I think I would also echo one of the comments I just read on "farewell" I think this is a case where too much purpleyness is NOT a good thing. ...

I think it's fine. The whole point of this piece is to give the reader a clear picture of the scene. The purpleyness works well in this kind of piece, ...

hmm, nice, especially for a first post. I'll echo what the previous reviewers said. For this short of a poem, I'd have to expect something really really good. Having a ...

Yeah, I see where you're coming from. I'm pretty much in the home stretch. I cheated though.. *Shifty eyes* I started my "Novel" A while ago... There. The truths out! ...

Wow! Tough decision. You do definitely look older than you are, especially in the second one. The first one has kinda awkard color, and just is too bright for me. ...

AWW! Nice picture. Something about the depth/angle is odd though. Have you tried using a red-eye reducer to get rid of the green? Might help.

Yeah, I have to say I agree with SeraphTree. Many of your actions seem to be a tad unrealistic, and though you have a nice plot, it needs to be ...

Yeah, I'll say. she does have a point though. I still really like your idea, but it could be developed upon more especially because this kind of story has been ...

Woah, I wasn't expecting that. Great job!! This really made me laugh out-loud.

Is their an option to say: WHO CARES? "Winner takes nothing" "Dragons Rule" "Monkeys Rock" COME ON!! I would have to say dragon though.....

Again, you seem to have gotten quite a few replies. :) I think having the changes in bold isn't really necessary, and I would take them out, since they kept ...

Very nice!! Aparently I came here to late. Would you rather have me critique something else that hasn't gotten as many replies? PM me. :D

Headache!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

40k!!!!!!!!!! Almost...... to bad I hit writers block.