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Re: Mom's flowers/ plants.
Hi! These remind me of summer, and gardening with my mom. Anyway, the problems I see are that a) you have too much clutter, and b) it's out of focus. ...
Jan 8, 2011 - Re: Hunger Games 3 - closed - started Jan 6, 2011
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Re: Critiques by Canislupis [Closed]
Right! Skins, part one of three is up. Sorry this is taking so long, guys. Occasional--Done! Thanks, I enjoyed that. Lindsey--Done as well! Liked that as well. All of you ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: I'm New...
Ah, no, I didn't mean remove odd associations. ^^; Those can be wonderful to read about, and I love making odd associations. However, once those odd associations are made and ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: need help with plot device
I'm not sure I completely understand what you're asking, but here goes anyway. What needs to happen (from what I see) is that a) He needs a reason to go ...
Jan 4, 2011 -
Re: Hunger Games 3 - closed - started
Claire He's back now, crashing through the burned bushes louder than the bear, which is still lying next to us in the dark. I do not like the way the ...
Jan 3, 2011 -
Re: Study Techniques
Depends on the subject and person. For example, I learn through reading words, or watching movies. Diagrams, people talking, or 'hands on" things just don't work for me. On the ...
Jan 3, 2011 -
Re: Hunger Games 3 - closed - started
Claire "Wait a second..." I hold up a hand, stopping Skye and waiting for my brain to catch up. She was ready to take this kid with us. But I ...
Jan 3, 2011 -
Re: Hunger Games 3 - closed - started
( i might be wrong, but i think the guy from 2 is already dead...) Umm.... yes. Definitely. I wanted him killed early on so I wouldn't have to write ...
Jan 2, 2011 -
Re: One of Them
Hi Azila! I don't actually have time for a review right now, but before I go, here are a few of my first thoughts upon reading this: 1. Gender and ...
Jan 2, 2011 -
Re: Featured Member: January 2011
Conratulations, Tanya!
Jan 2, 2011 -
Re: Comatose - Prologue
Hi again! I don't think it's a problem, and I wouldn't shift to the woman's POV--I like how.... removed, and cold, she seems. I think getting inside her head might ...
Dec 31, 2010 -
Re: Alone (3-Pronged Contest Entry, Edited)
Hi Azila! Thank you so much--now you've given me three reviews. >.< I feel bad now. Anyway, again, I agree--and I did try to keep everything the same while cutting ...
Dec 31, 2010 -
Re: Hunger Games 3 - closed - started
Claire My hands are shaking. It's because I'm scared. No. It isn't. My entire body is shaking. "Skye," I choke out, stumbling. My eyes waver in and out of focus. ...
Dec 30, 2010 -
Re: Trouble on the Homefront - Prologue
Hello! Sorry this took so long. Now, I think Wolf covered the nitpicks already, so I'm not going to go here. I like this story--the idea of a resistence movement ...
Dec 30, 2010
