canislupis

From what I read, this seems like pretty good writing, but I really think you need to break it up into smaller bits, space it out more, and change it ...

Really nice colors. It's body looks a little stumpy though...... Kinda like its too short for it's width. :) I like it though! Its interesting.

Nashoba Mystic Alpha Nashoba hung his head, thinking. the golgot offer was a good one, if he wanted to take it up. A ally in one of the other packs ...

Tobi Blood Mountain Fadalia was back on the rcok now, talking quietly with Tallulah. The other wolves were whispering quietly, nervously discussing the unconscious wolf. A large empty ring had ...

Naira Mystics The few other wolves that had chosen to stay behind were also dead. All of them. They're family members nosed the bodies, howling mournfully. The camp was completely ...

Tallulah Blood mountain Slowly the pedaling of the wolv'es legs ceased as Fadalia leaned over him. His breathing had eased, but he seemed to be unconscious. the other wolves circled ...

Thanks!!!!! That was helpful. I'll work on the stuff you mentioned. See ya! Thanks for the review.

Thanks!!!!!!!!! If you are interested, the next three bits are also up. Thanks for posting!

Sadly, no. I was THIS CLOSE! though. Its because we migth be moving soon. Anyway, thanks everybody for your reviews!

Sanuya Saber toothed wolf The shrill cry of the roc split the morning air as Sanuya stretched luxuriously and ushered her two pups out into the open. She lifted her ...

Naira mystics Almost as soon as the gasp was out of her throat, Naira felt her sister skid and turned in time to see her crash into herself. The world ...

Tallulah Blood Mountain As Fadalia raised her muzzle to speak, the clearing was instantly silent. "Red oak pack is in good health. Prey is running well and our pups have ...

OOH...... This is going to stick with me for a while. Like had already been said, I didn't find much wrong with this, but I'm not much of a hand ...

Talllulah Blood mountain Tallulah Jumped up on the huge rock first, stepping over to make room for Fadalia. She nodded her head to the other alpha, letting her go first ...